Freewrite 4: My Name

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Freewrite 4: My Name

Post  cbehling on Tue Oct 26, 2010 11:24 am

My name is Charles Vincent William Behling.
Kinda fancy name, no?
That’s why I go by Charlie. I think of my name more as Charlie than anything else because I have always been called Charlie. No one ever called me Charles, well not really. A few friends did to be funny sometimes. But Charlie was my name. On my soccer teams everyone got a nickname. There was Murph, a shortened form of Murphy. There was Hammer, because there were so many people named ‘Ryan’, and there was Charlie. I mean, that’s not even really a nickname. It’s the same number of letters as my real name. [By the way, every name I have has 7 letters, including my mother’s maiden name (Raccuia – good luck pronouncing that one!) and I was born in July. And I only figured this out about a year ago.]
Anyway, nicknames. In elementary school Pokemon was a big thing. Being named Charlie, the only logical thing to do was for people to start calling me Charmander. I was too big to be a charmelion, but not big enough for Charzard, or so I was told. But as Pokemon faded out, so did that nickname. I had another one for a short while: it was Bones. Apparently it was because I was a tiny bony kid on a lacrosse team holding my own against guys twice my size and weight. I must be some sort of weird skeleton thing. Right? Hence, Bones. But it didn’t stick. None of the names I’ve been called have stuck. So people mostly just stopped trying.
I had a history teacher who called me Chuck when he though I wasn’t paying attention. It didn’t help that he called me by a name no one else ever called me. So I’d be taking notes, or doodling, and he’d scream, “WHAT DO YOU THINK, CHUCK?” And I’d just keep writing, until I thought, “Oh wait, I’m chuck, aren’t i?” My slowness to respond was taken as not paying attention.
The only name that has stuck besides Charlie is Char. A very, very, close friend called me that one day. She said she liked how cute it sounded, and ever since then to her I have been Char. Unless she’s angry.
If someone calls me Charles I know they don’t know me. If they say it in a funny voice, they are trying to be funny. I’m Charlie to most people. It’s just who I am, I guess.

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Re: Freewrite 4: My Name

Post  MaryShelley on Tue Oct 26, 2010 12:54 pm

Very nicely written, Charlie. A detailed response.

But I DO like Charles! I prefer "les" to "lie", but it IS more formal sounding or stately or old fashioned and Charlie is sweet and likable. But I always wonder about names that never get used.

I also like the visual image of Bones on the lacrosse field.

And lucky number 7!
(Your "character" comes across in this freewrite.)

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Re: Freewrite 4: My Name

Post  Admin on Fri Oct 29, 2010 11:24 am

Very interesting with the seven letters. Have you ever asked your parents about that? I want to know if it was intention or coincidence!

Interesting nicknames. I particularly liked Charmander. Charlie is nice too, though!

There's a very distinct voice in this piece that adds to the story. Good job on letting that show through!

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Post  LEit on Fri Oct 29, 2010 11:26 am

I really like that bit on the nickname Chuck. I've had people call me bizarre nicknames out of the blue before, and they're surprised when I don't respond. It's funny how your teacher took that the wrong way. I like how you have 7 letters in all of your names. Is your father's name like that too?

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Re: Freewrite 4: My Name

Post  Sarah Seko on Fri Oct 29, 2010 11:29 am

Your voice is very apparent in this freewrite. I really liked your descriptions of all of your nicknames (particularly Bones) as well as your personal response to your name. The scene about "Chuck" was very amusing.

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